Okay, here are some constructive criticism.
First of all, you need descREEEEEEEEptions. For your tech, for your military equipment, for your tactics and army structure. "Birdium republic have some of the best fighters, tanks, infantry equipment and quality in the galaxy" is not a description of the army due to the fact that there is no specifics.
Secondly, that number of star systems is hilariously huge.
Thirdly, I would advise you to create at least a couple of names of the most important figures of your state plus the names of the key planets, and at least some reasonable reason for the three wars against the evil Communists.